#63

My best friend is Sarah Louise Muncey. We have been friends since third grade and the summer after fourth grade she moved across the street for me and we became best friends. She moved the summer before    our freshman year of high school but only like 7 driving minutes away. She moved because her mom got married and they built a new house, I was sad and thought we wouldn't spend as much together but I think I might have been at her new house even more than her old one. Sarah and I were voted best friends in our senior class for our senior awards. We have went on vacation together every summer since eighth grade excluding this pass summer because of ours and our friends graduations parties. We have went to Fripp Island, South Carolina, Orlando, Atlanta, Chicago, and Myrtle Beach. We are going back to Fripp Island this summer too like two weeks after we get out of school. I'm so excited. It's a private island where her step uncle lives and it's beautiful and so much fun. Everything I do with Sarah is so much fun we can make anything a good time. Sarah plays softball at Adrian College in Michigan. I haven't seen her since I went home about a month ago for her brothers wedding. I miss her so much I finally get to come visit her at her college during spring break since I'm not going anywhere. I've only visited her once and that was before we started school and she has only visited me once because she always has softball, but since Ohio State gets out much later than everyone else she is going to come here a lot during spring quarter. I don't know how we go so long without seeing each other when everyone found out we were going to different colleges everyone was shocked and always asked us what we were going to do without one another, but we're still as close as ever and will be all summer. Me and Sarah will be best friends forever!

#62

My favorite place in the whole world is The Ohio State University. I am so proud to say that I go here. This place has so much to offer and I've enjoyed every bit of it. The best 6, or so, months of my life have been the six months that I have attended this university. Since I've been here I've have learned so much both in and out of the classroom, made the best of friends, met tons of new people, and had so much fun. I didn't think I would meet as many or as good as friends as I have since I've been here but I have made just as many friends, if not more, as I had in high school. I have also met four best friends that I know I will have for the rest of my life. I've have taken challenging and stimulating classes and learned so much, even if it was very hard and annoying, in the two quarters that I have been here and am proud to know as much as I do and learn more in the next 3 or so years. I have also had unbelievable experiences, the best ones being the football and basketball games. It has been unbelievable to be a part of the student section and buckeye nation and to watch in person the things people watch on television all over the country. Also to get to interact with the student athletes that people back home, and all over the country, know of and hear about all the time on TV. The pep rallies, the mirror lake jump-in, the concerts, the parties, the bars, everything has been amazing and life changing so far and I wouldn't trade it for anything!

#61

1. For one of the boy's basketball games this year (not tonights) I decided to go a few hours early so I could get good seats like right behind the bench. I was probably like the twenty some person in line and was with just one other friend. When I went to hand them my student ticket to exchange for the real ticket they asked how many were in my group and I said just me and my friends and they said we were the two seats filling the end court  side tickets right in front on the student section. So we got to sit court side. When the ball was knocked out of bounds one time it came right to me and I got to throw it in to Jon Diebler. It was so sweet, ever since I try to get there early and pray that it will happen again. 

2. Over winter break I went to stay with all of my friends that I met here at school in Akron, which is obviously close to cleveland. I was staying for three nights and we wanted to think of something to do one night so we went to the Cavs game since it was only a half hour from their house and the tickets weren't expensive at all. We were going to a friends party after so we figured we'd leave a little after half time so we could get there on time and figured they would be getting killed by that time anyways. We started having a really good time and getting into the game which was really close so we decided we wanted to stay till it was over. It ended up going into overtime and the Cavs won!

3. One time in a cooking class in high school we were making cookies and we got tons of dough so my group was exciting to get to make a lot of cookies because we were all always really hungry at that time in the day. We made a tons of cookies on one sheet and just put a few that wouldn't fit on another. When the cookies were done I went to take the tray with all of them out of the oven and it burnt the side of my finger so i like tossed it onto the stove and it slid off into the trash can and started a small fire and was smoking everywhere. No cookies for us.

#60

My word for this blog is going to be basketball because today I went to the boy's last home regular game of the season against Wisconsin. It was probably one of the coolest things I've ever been to. As most of you should know Wisconsin gave us our first lost of the season ruining our perfect record so everyone was jacked to play them again especially at home. I got to the basketball game four hours and twenty minutes early today, so I could get good seats. I did get pretty good seats but not the ones you think I would deserve for waiting in the cold for three hours until they started letting people in. Tonights basketball game was senior night, which was sad but the cool thing about that is David Lighty, an all-star senior guard for the buckeyes, went through the whole line like two and a half hours before game time taking pictures with the fans, signing autographs, and thanking everyone for waiting in that long, cold line for so long to support them. I got a picture with him! The arena was so loud and hyped for the big game and there was even fireworks for the pregame show. The buckeyes did amazing. They set two NCAA records shooting 93.3 percent from the 3 point range, and following the first 3 point miss with 14 straight made. After the game we got to run onto the court and watch the team receive the big ten trophy and cut down the net. The buckeye's basketball team finished with a perfect season at home and are rated number one in the nation. Go Bucks!

#59

This topic have been on my mind so much lately and it is the most stressful thing ever. I took my survey class for business but now I'm not sure if I'm going to stay with that. Ever since I was younger I always would switch between becoming a doctor or lawyer. For the most part it was always a doctor and then my senior year I leaned more towards lawyer. Starting at the end of my sophomore year though I became really interested in business and figured no matter what profession I chose I could just get a business degree for undergrad since pre med or pre law are specific majors. I decided law was way out of the question this summer because I HATE writing and I would be doing tons of that for law school and also I like math and science too much to not take any of those classes. So my most logical and perfect plan if it worked out was that I wanted to get a degree in business finance and then try to go to medical school to eventually become a surgeon. I know this seems far fetched but I know it wasn't out of the question because medical schools like well-rounded people and also my peer advisor in the business school was doing basically the same thing, but minoring in chemistry. So, so far I have been taking math and chemistry so that right now my classes count for pre med and for business, but I've realized there is a very slim chance I would graduate on time if I majored in business but then also took all the pre med requirements. So most recently I am trying to decide if I should be a finance major or switch to biology so that I know I have the pre-med requirements. I would really like to have a business degree from here since Fisher is such a good school and you could do a range of things with the BSBA but then I feel I've already ruined my GPA for business by taking chemistry classes for the bio/pre med major and that staying with business would leave not a very good chance for med school. Then again I might like business enough that I wouldn't want to go to medical school. It's two totally different majors and so confusing but I can't make up my mind.

#57

I barely ever remember my dreams. I know that when I'm about to fall asleep I start to think about something and then begin dreaming but I'm not fully asleep and then if I move or change but train of thought, I think, I like wake up. It's really weird I get so mad because I know I was almost asleep and during that second where I like wake up, I have already forgot about what I was thinking, or maybe I should say dreaming, about. When I was younger I feel like I remembered my dreams a lot more frequently  and I know I had nightmares I could remember. Now though, if I were to have a bad dream I would wake up knowing it was bad but not know what its about. On the rare occasions where I remember my dreams they're usually about famous people, ones I like. My most recent dream was about Pauly D. I don't know why I'm not like obsessed with him, I do like him a lot but it was really weird. Whenever I do remember what I dreamed about it seems so real that I have to wake up and sit there and think if it really happens. Another dreaming thingI experience is when I go tanning. I go tanning kind of a lot and have been tanning for a few years now and I fall asleep faster and better in a tanning bed than anywhere else. I dream every time I tan but as per usual I always forget the dreams but I know I do dream. Also almost every time I tan i have the falling type dream where I think I'm falling off something and sometimes when I wake up to fast I slam my head on the top of the tanning bed. I don't know why these dreams always happen when I'm tanning.

#56

Title: Who Am I? Celebrity Image

Date: 1 March 2011

Subject: Individual Memo

Decision: Revise and Resubmit

Dear Author, 

Thank you for the opportunity to read about this topic. Your argument stating how you should be true to who you are is very agreeable. I do think the topic could be more compelling in the writing style and format. It is however, a timely topic that we all can relate too and is also relevant.

This article is timely because celebrities images are hugely impacted by the media and technology these days causing them to not be themselves. With so much fame a lot of young stars are trying to fit in and live the party life and many are heading down the wrong road. Also with all the paparazzi and the enormous popularity of social networking cites, such as twitter and facebook, celebrities have to watch every word they say and how they say it because thousands of fan are accessible to this information so often times celebrities will act in certain ways to release the image they want the public to see. Even outside social networks celebs are constantly making themselves seem certain ways for the public. 

This article is relevant because one will always have a situation where he/she will have to decide how they will portray themselves towards others, and weather that person they portray is putting on an act or is the true them, and there will always be factors that can influence one to lose their authentic self and put on a front. Especially with us all being in college and meeting tons of new people this is very relevant to how real or fake we are towards the new people we meet and how they are towards us. 

This is article not very compelling, however. The sentence and paragraph structures are often hard to follow. The word "you" is used a lot, I don't know if that is proper in this kind type of article or not. I also feel that it could have been made a little more interesting and that there could be some more sufficient use of ethos and pathos to make the reader realize and agree you're argument better. I did find the nondisclosure parts interesting though. 

There are a few sentence-level mistakes that I found easier ways to state. The following are a few:

1.3 and 1.4- You may say, "Oh, I know who I am," but have you noticed that sometimes it seems that other people know you better than you know yourself?"

1.5- You may also notice yourself doing and saying things you never thought you would. 

1.6 and 1.7- We've all heard the phrases "Don't judge a book by it's cover" and "What you see is what you get," but are these phrases true or false?

2.1- I think that, in a way, we all have our own both personal and public personas just like the celebrities. 

2.8 and 2.9- Of course, celebrities have always been products, and they've always had to create marketable public images in order to succeed, but learning how to exist publicly is not just for celebrities anymore. 

4.3 and 4.4- It doesn't matter if it's true or not our society love to know about it, but can we believe these "need-to-know stories?

Thank you for your opinions and statements over this topic. I think this article will reach its best potential as a revise and resubmit article and it would be very beneficial to do so.

Sincerely,

Allison Johnson